Critique 2016
5 stories
Dreams Are Forever [#Wattys2016] by teenagebookworm_
Dreams Are Forever [#Wattys2016]
teenagebookworm_
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  • Votes 614
  • Parts 9
"They say if you dream a thing more than once, it's sure to come true," I tell my daughter Shelby, quoting her favourite Disney character and trying to believe it myself. Ever since I introduced Shelby to her first Disney film, she's dreamed of working at Disney World. What could seem better to an eleven year old than being a beautiful princess at the happiest place on Earth? My Shelby might not be like the other children in her class. But who says different is wrong? She's simply a little girl with big dreams. "Do not be fooled by its commonplace appearance. Like so many things, it is not what is outside, but what is inside that counts." - Aladdin
Ebby Flint and the Sword of Sorrows (Book 1 in the Artis Trilogy) by STAlberts
Ebby Flint and the Sword of Sorrows (Book 1 in the Artis Trilogy)
STAlberts
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  • Votes 21
  • Parts 15
Ebby Flint never thought she would have to save the new world, Artis. And she definitely didn't think her cat, Sir Fluffs would be the one to lead her there, but here she is. Learning to control her new powers and leading an entire army in search of the Sword of Sorrows, leaves Ebby Flint with a new life. Join her on her adventure to defeat the unknown evil surrounding Artis. _________________________________ I'm no longer the Ebby Flint I used to be. I'm not a high school student. I'm not Terri and Derek's daughter. I'm not Marcus's best friend. I've been stripped of those titles, but I've gained new ones. I am the daughter of Rowan and Juliana. I belong to the Kingdom of Artis. And I am a witch.
Restless Heartbeats  by rainbowpetal17
Restless Heartbeats
rainbowpetal17
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  • Votes 27
  • Parts 17
He stares at her in awe, as their eyes connect. She can feel her heartbeat increasing, as his light grey eyes twinkle with wonder. Sophia is a 21 year old Canadian - Pakistani girl. She is studying hard to complete her University degree, in the hopes of following her dreams to work as a Nurse one day. However, her life is about to be turned upside down by a gorgeous British - Pakistani boy named Saif, who has been thrown into her life in the form of a marriage proposal. Will Sophie accept the proposal and start the next chapter of her life with a complete stranger? Or will she reject the proposal and face the dire consequences from her traditional Pakistani parents? If you like a romantic novel with an adventurous twist, then this story is for you. Join Sophie in this heart-warming, dramatic, and thrilling story about, love, family, and heartbreak.
Toxic Impulse ⁕ by TopazGems
Toxic Impulse ⁕
TopazGems
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  • Votes 3,702
  • Parts 13
*Completed* "Well?" he asked. She turned around swiftly, her hair swiping against his chin and mouth. "Well...I'm still contemplating..." She tapped her fingers along his chest then met his eyes. "If you deserve that information." She smiled. He grinned. Her eyes read hunger as they darted from his own, to his moist lips, and back again. She stepped closer to him, their lips only mere centimeters apart. His hot, minty breath sent tingles up her legs as she yearned to taste them. There was no need in waiting, she knew what she wanted and she would have it. --- Being the head woman in charge comes with many perks. Many of these which involve living a sensuous, adventurous, and lustrous life at the prime age of 25. For one woman, she damn near has everything. Everything that she alone sought out and achieved on her own. Her wondrous beauty and mystifying lifestyle have many craving to be in her presence. She is a master of allurement. the spellbinding power comes naturally to her. She takes pride in seeking and engaging in pleasure. Sometimes, though, such pleasures come with a risk. For if she isn't wary, she may crumble in her own dominion. --- ***Mature content (intimacy, language, some violence) Graphic descriptions ahead. If you're ready for a whirlwind of emotions, step inside!***
It Just Kind Of Happened by TheAlienator
It Just Kind Of Happened
TheAlienator
  • Reads 1,752
  • Votes 305
  • Parts 29
The best adventures are never planned. A cancelled flight leaves those waiting for it with more than they bargained for, which proves that fate can sometimes creep into life when it is least expected. Four strangers meet in an airport and together they embark on the trip of a lifetime. Follow them on their journey as they learn that you can discover new things about yourself when new people come to show you traits that had been there all along. However, the journey isn't always easygoing; you may get lost and confused along the way but once you're there...it feels really great. And, when people ask you how, you can tell them: it just kind of happened. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "It Just Kind of Happened is a very endearing story of how four different people discover more of themselves as much as they discover much from each other. The author, @TheAlienator, perfectly crafted a charming chemistry between characters. Chemistry that you can rarely read in books; chemistry that has more meaning into it. A very commendable, and unutterably lovable read!" - @FernRisher "A part of you screams John Green. That's how fluid this. Like what. So fluid. The internal dialogue inside their heads is just mental candy for me; it's kinda crazy." - @Sxilenced "Well this was quite different and a very fun read! Your characters are all very distinct and fun, and you have a good narrative voice for each one." - @solacing amazing summary by the amazing @WishesOnStars <-- she's a lifesaver, really XD